其实托福独立写作有很多技巧，并不是一点两点这样简单。为了帮助大家更清楚的抓住这方面问题，出国留学网小编在下文中针对性的做了一些解析，希望能对考生有所帮助。
托福独立写作有一部分是要求你表达自己对于某种观点的选择，而这个时候让你选择的观点往往是呈现对比关系的。那么如何去写好这样的作文呢?看看以下例题。
题目：
Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific examples to support your answer.
有些人喜欢住在小城镇里，而有些人则喜欢住在大城市里。你喜欢住在哪里呢?给出你的观点并阐述理由。
原文(4.5分左右):
If I were asked to choose to live either in a small town or in a big city, I would absolutely make a choice of living in the small town other than in a big city. My reasons will be detailed as follows.
Firstly, there is much less pollution in a small town than in a big city. Breathing fresh air contributes to good health. If we spend our daily life from waking up in the morning to sleeping at night in a big city, the chance that pollution damages our health would be greater. Pollution from exhausted gas, noises and wasted water could do harm to our respiratory system and other body operations. On the other hand, you will normally notice that people in a small town are not as sick as city dwellers. Like most people, I hope to have a good health in order to live for a long time with my beloved family and friends.
Secondly, the cost of living in a small town is obviously lower than in a big city. I do not want to use all of my salary just to pay my expenses--I want to save money, too. I would like to save my money for several purposes such as my child’s education and my family’s leisure activities. If I live in a big city, I think that I can not build my savings because I have to pay more to purchase the same thing that I can buy cheaper when I live in a small town. For example, if I rent a house, the house in a small town would certainly be cheaper. If I would like to have dinner out, again, the restaurant in a small town will certainly be cheaper.
Thirdly, small town provides better environment and scenery. The view in a big city is always covered by the forest of what we call ‘concrete forests’. However, when we come to a small town, we could always be astonished by the beautiful scenery. We can also have great natural environment. All these can bring me real happiness and peace in heart.
In conclusion, for the reason that I cannot tolerate pollution, that I want to save my money, and that I like better environment and scenery, living in a small town is my preference rather than living in a big city..
专家修改(6分):
(1)If I were asked to choose whether to live either in a small town or in a big city, I would not hesitate to choose the small town. (2) I grew up in a delightful one myself. (3) Below I describe some of the striking contrasts I have found.
(4)First of all, I put a premium on my health. (5) There is much more pollution in a city than in a small town. (6) I, for one, want to breathe clean air and drink clean water. (7)A person who spends most of his daily life in the city – where all of the human-made impurities are the most concentrated – will simply not be as healthy as he would have been in a small town, with the same habits. (8) Like most people, I hope to live a long, healthy life that I can spend with my beloved family and friends.
(9)The city also does not seem to be good for my emotions. (10) While towns are peaceful, friendly, and quiet, the city creates all kinds of physical and emotional stresses with its constant turmoil. (11) Every day there is loud traffic and construction, with rude people adding to the noise. (12) But, worse, still crime is rampant in the city. (13) I have often felt that I cannot trust any of the countless strangers I see when I am there. (14) In the town where I grew up, everyone knew one another, and no one felt a need even to lock his or her door. (15) In the city, one locks everything – car, house, and bicycle – because not to do so would be foolish. (16) I find the anonymity, the breakneck pace, and the constant fear too much to bear.
(17)There is also the practical matter of expenses. (18) Simply put, I want to save money. (19) I can do that very well by living in my hometown. (20) As a writer who is paid by the book, my location does not affect my salary. (21) Many of the expenses of the city seem unnecessarily wasteful to me anyway. (22) I often catch myself buying things that I don’t need in the city just because they are there. (23)I know that I dine out too often when I am in New York and Chicago. (24)：
(25)Finally, small towns are much more beautiful than urban centers. (26)The view in a big city is always covered by what we call ‘concrete forests’—mountainous skyscrapers. (27) I would gladly trade these for a view of real mountains, not to mention dense, lush forests close to my house that I can visit any time I want. (28) Wildlife is also more plentiful and varied in a small town. As pretty as some city parks are, there is just no comparison between the two environments.
(29)I have stressed the negative aspects of the city, but I look at it this way: while the cities contain all of the world-class restaurants, art museums, drama, etc., there is really no need to be there for these attractions every day. In fact, when I go to the city on business, and make it a treat, I feel I get just the right dose of high-quality entertainment and culture. (30) The choice is obvious for me: if I want a peaceful, quiet, clean place to live, where I trust everyone around me and my finances are relatively secure, a small town is the place to be.
例文评论：
一、文章类型：观点对比型。
二、语言运用。
1、句(27)
优秀：I would gladly trade these for a view of real mountains, not to mention dense, lush forests close to my house that I can visit any time I want.
评论：这一句有些词用的很好，如trade, not to mention, lust等，不仅准确而且使整个文章的用词富于变化。再一次提醒，不要老是用have, get, go 等词。
2、句(29)
优秀：I have stressed the negative aspects of the city, but I look at it this way: while the cities contain all of the world-class restaurants, art museums, drama, etc., there is really no need to be there for these attractions every day. In fact, when I go to the city on business, and make it a treat, I feel I get just the right dose of high-quality entertainment and culture.
评论：这里加入了对城市的正面评价，使得观点不那么偏执，也使文章更为丰满。当然这要在篇幅允许的情况下使用。
三、常见错误及误区。
1、原文中的If I were asked to choose to live either in a small town or in a big city, I would absolutely make a choice of living in the small town other than in a big city.
这里可以看出行文的啰嗦。当前文已经有过choose了，下文的choice前最好用the而非用a。要注意代词的用法。而且只有两个选择，作出一个就等于放弃了另一个，没有必要重复。还有就是absolutely的用法，这是中国学生常见的误区。Absolutely这个词带给人的感觉是毫无退路，要慎用，建议查一下词典，看看典型的用法。而改后的make not hesitate to 则不仅表达了选择的速度也表明了选择的态度，是比较好的用法。而且用一个动词词组也比较富于变化。
2、原文中的However, when we come to a small town, we could always be astonished by the beautiful scenery.
这句话的关键词是astonish，但这个词用在这里并不合适。因为一般人们对小镇的美景都会有一定的了解，用impressed可能会更好。在选词的时候要在时间允许的情况下更精确和符合逻辑。
