Computer and I ( By Simmy )
I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present， which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that i indulged myself in googling an army of useful information i had expected ，and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless， feeling that the whole world belonged to me.
exceedingly 替换very
thrilling 替换exciting
sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb 替换sb. be interested in sth.
google 替换search
an army of 替换a lot of
The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and technology， computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say we have been submerged by them， in large measure!
The dawn of the new century witnessed 是一个精彩句型，用来描述在某个时期发生了什么事情;Increasing popularity 替换more and more popular
Coincident with … 非常地道的句型，表达“与…一致”的意思，替换With …
Advancement 替换development
Pour into ( flood into / swarm into )替换enter into
Current ( currently )替换now
Appeal to sb. 替换sb. be interested in sth.
Growing individuals 替换more and more people
It is no exaggeration to say 经典句型， 说某事是毫不夸张的
For a start， we can， freely， search desired information at any moment . Little by little， our knowledge will be well enriched， and our horizons will be greatly broadened. Additionally， we can get huge recreations online by chatting， playing games， or delivering email.
For a start 替换To begin with
We can， freely， search 用了插入语的写作手法
our knowledge will be well enriched， and our horizons will be greatly broadened. 用了非常精彩的被动
Additionally 替换In addition / Besides
Deliver 替换send
